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The 5th Doctor (Peter Davison)

The 5th Doctor is an incarnation of the Timeless being named The Doctor, this version usually wears a beige or cream suit with a piece of celery attached to the suit for some reason, its unknown if its real celery that he swaps out before they go off or a plastic replica, he is seen as the most calm and kind of The Doctor’s incarnations but is also referred too as the most bland by some such as his 6th form, he is a big fan of the Earth sport Cricket.

He regenerated in the presence of Adric, Nyssa and Tegan; it was an unstable regeneration so they went to Castrovalva to relax only to encounter The Master before starting his adventures by encountering The 7th Doctor, the year 1016, the planet Vaga, the 1950’s, the Rutan Host, The Mara, 17th Century Mississippi, Toymaker, shouting statues, Houdini and a 1925 Cricket game.

Next The Doctor’s companion Adric dies with the Dinosaurs because of Cybermen and Tegan leaves and re-joins a few times followed by encounters with Daleks, Saturn, Shayde, Omega, Turlough, River Song, Black Guardian and Kamelion. The 5th Doctor regenerates from poisoning after giving the only antidote to Peri.

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-         The celery shouldn’t occupy that much.

-         “5th” Doctor etc. is always just “Fifth” Doctor

-         In general, I don’t think we get to know the Doctor all that much here.

Here’s a great description of him from the wiki:

-         The Fifth Doctor was fond of cricket and wore a stick of celery on his lapel that he used as a safety precaution for his allergy to certain gases in the Praxis range of the spectrum. After a difficult regeneration, this Doctor displayed energy, compassion, and innocence not seen in his predecessors. His character was very human and vulnerable. Like them, he used improvisation as the best way out of a tricky situation. The Fifth Doctor was the first incarnation since the First Doctor to go "hands-free" and forgo the usage of a sonic screwdriver after having it destroyed. He occasionally wore glasses, even though he didn't need them; he only wore them to make himself look clever. He was the first Doctor to sacrifice himself for another, when he and Peri Brown were dying from spectrox toxaemia; with only one dose of the antidote available, he gave her the cure rather than taking it himself.

Now that I think of it, it might be better to use this as the basis for a new text. It’s only 157 words, so you could add a bit more to it if you want.

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The Healing Beam (Technology)

The healing beam is a medical device that could treat post-operative shock, open wounds and internal haemorrhaging most likely invented by Time Lords as The Doctor in his 6th incarnation used one to save human pilot Hugo Lang who was dying after his Starfighter was shot down, crashing on the desert planet Titan III, according to The Doctor it is more effective than a Laser scalpel.

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Great, but you need to work on grammar. Will edit your texts in the next round of feedback so they are easier to read. J

The 9th Doctor (Christopher Eccleston)

The 9th Doctor is an incarnation of The Doctor a Timeless being this version usually wears a leather jacket. He was emotionally exhausted and filled with sorrow as well as showing anger and regret often however he often hide this by acting goofy as he spends more time with his new companions however he eventually becomes a little better emotionally he was also sometimes accidently uncaring in certain situation.

After he regenerated he lost his memories of saving Gallifrey and losing his memory of the event The Doctor starts his adventures alone, saving a family from the Titanic, meeting Churchill 3 times and fighting a Cyberman.

Then The Doctor fights the Autons and the Nestene and gains companion Rose Tyler. The 9th Doctor’s adventures after that include Earth’s destruction, 1869 ghosts and a WW1 football game, The Slitheen, a single Dalek, Adam Mitchell, Rose’s red bike and father’s death during a time paradox with Reapers, The Empty Child, meeting Captain Jack, a Soviet base, a werewolf in future Vegas, a world shaper, The Doctor’s fans, Gargoyles, Mickey Smith, Jackie Tyler, UNIT, Sin-Eaters, companions Ali, Tara Mishra and Lynda Moss. He regenerates after absorbing Bad Wolf from Rose to defeat Daleks.

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Same feedback as for the Fifth Doctor; you’re focusing too much on irrelevant points that tell WHAT he did, but not WHO he is.

Example from the wiki:

§  The Seventh Doctor was a keen strategist and scientist and, especially early on in his life, lighthearted. This Doctor was a planner of the highest order. Embracing the complexities of time travel and his ability to manipulate and plan for the future, the Seventh Doctor fully embraced his role of Time's Champion, even if it risked alienating his companions. However, he wished to help heal psychological scars from which his companions suffered. It was at this point the Doctor began looking towards his own origins from the Dark Days of Gallifrey, realising he was far more than just another Time Lord.

This is only 100 words, so lots of room to add a bit of bonus info.

Nukeball (Game)

Nuke Ball is a popular but illegal sport of the species known as The Judoon, a Rhino-like alien race from the planet Judoonia, the sport was outlawed to avoid killing all life on their own planet, sometimes beings will still play the game illegally resulting in destruction sometimes to entire planets or even solar systems making the game not worth the risk as of course the players would all die if the game went wrong.

The Doctor and Amy Pond end up playing a game with Terraphiles from the future (which included Judoon members) facing against a team of pirates lead by the crossover character Captain Cornelius from the novel series The Condition of Muzak, The Doctor and Amy end up having to try win the game fairly while also making sure the game doesn’t wipe out a solar system and find a traitor on their own team who is trying to sabotage their chances, at one point The 11th Doctor travels to another universe without the negative effects shown during Rise of the Cybermen.

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Very good – though grammar could use some work. Where/how did you find all this extra info?

The Foretold (Enemy)

The Foretold is an ancient soldier that looks like a mummy due to the bandages used to care for his wounds; he is trapped near a scroll (flag), he has the ability to teleport and can only be seen by the person he is trying to kill which takes 66 seconds. His victims appear like they have had heart attacks and he kills by touching the head and absorbing energy from them in order to gain sustenance, his abilities actually come from malfunctioning technology which includes keeping him out of phase and alive while he decomposes he always kills the weakest person first.

5000 years after that The 12th Doctor encounters him on space train The Orient Express, he and Clara Oswald team up with Professor Moorhouse who knows a lot about The Foretold and Maisie Pitt, after more deaths The Doctor uses the Triage method to find out who the next victim is he defeats The Foretold by saying “we surrender” causing him to turn to dust. After that The Doctor finds out the computer Gus was built to study The Foretold. Later the Foretold appears in the TARDIS; it is unknown how or why he came back?

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Good, but a bit more “feeling” would be nice.

Truth or Consequences (Game)

Truth or Consequences was a TV game show similar too Trivial Pursuit in America based on a child’s game called Forfeits hosted on NBX Radio as well as TV networks CBS and NBC starting in 1940 and ending in 1988 with many hosts throughout its years, contestants had two seconds to answer a trivia question if they got the question wrong their consequences were to perform a wacky stunt or some kind of strange task, the show had an ending catchphrase “Hoping all your consequences are happy ones” The show was eventually cancelled.

It was revealed that a town in New Mexico named itself Truth or consequences, According to Clara Oswald this was because the Mayor lost a bet and had to rename the town to that. The Twelfth Doctor used two empty boxes with buttons on them to play a game of Truth or Consequences to talk Bonnie (Zygons) and Kate Stewart (Humans) to stop the war by giving a speech about the horrors of war and how endless it is; in the end The Doctor uses the game to save the day.

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Feedback from Toastmaster: You need to write about the episode: The Doctor creates a box as the object of an endgame. The two fighting parties, the Zygons who wants to be Zygon on Earth, and the Humans and Zygons who wish to continue living disguised and among Humans. Ultimately, the box is just a box, but the Doctor was able to prevent a catastrophe by get the two parties talking instead of fighting. The ultimatum the box is supposed to give is also a resemblance of ultimatum in The Day of The Doctor.